This tutorial comes courtesy of episode 129 and 130 of The Taylor Stevens Show. This video contains an edited compilation of parts one and two of a three part series. The material covers roughly 1200 words and is taken from within chapter 5 of a contemporary romance.
In this scene the main character experiences a panic attack during a grappling session while at judo practice. The author's biggest concerns were avoiding cliches and making sure the character's actions and reactions didn't create confusion.
In this first video we go over the material line by line highlighting the various areas that would benefit from a rewrite. There are plenty of benefits in watching and following along but for those who are ready to take their craft to the next level these episodes provide the hands-on homework challenge to rework the material on your own.
In the next video we'll go back over this same material segment by segment with before-and-after solutions. For those that did the homework assigment this is an opportunity to compare your reworked material against mine, analyze what I did on a line by line basis, and discover what works best for your particular style and why.
In this series our primary focus is on:
~~ How to spot out-of-order character movements.
~~ How to reorder elements within a sentence or paragraph for clarity and emotional impact.
~~ How to avoid feeling words.
~~ How to avoid vagueness.
~~ The issue with "ing" words and the "Don't Start a Sentence with a Gerund" rule.
~~ Why and how it's okay to break that rule.
~~ How to utilize thought -> action -> speech within mulitple paragraphs.
~~ How paragraph breaks and white space can become one of your most powerful writing tools.