Writing Exercise #5
(Prompt from Reddit) [Scientists have created a machine that, before a person's death, contains their consciousness and creates a simulated paradise. However, there appears to be a glitch in the system...] I howled at the top of my lungs, from the top of the mountain, to no avail. The clouds hung around me with a smug sense of superiority, like sheep who knew I wasn't a member of their flock and never would be. The sky was perfect blue, the air crisp and wild. A lake rippled serenely below me. There was a refreshingly brisk breeze, and pretty much everything I could see, in every direction, all the way to the horizon, dripped with gorgeousness. My cries of despair echoed oddly. There was, after all, nothing around me for them to echo from. So there was another thing for me to add to my list of grievances - they hadn't gotten the sound model quite right, either. It was a minor issue. The real issue - the one that drove me to shout pleas to all-too-existent gods who, nevertheless, weren't listening - stuck out of my face. It had five toes, and yes, you could say that it smelled, but it surely wasn't any proper sort of nose. It blocked the middle of my field of vision. Whenever I stuck my tongue out, I licked heel. In fact, it was my right foot. It had the same scar on the ankle, the same toe shapes. If that wasn't enough, it also moved when my "other" right foot moved. There was a tendency for me to kick myself in the forehead if I tried to run. So - what had gone wrong? How was it that the scientists and software developers at Virtual Valhalla had gotten the model data so perversely scrambled when they uploaded their simulacrum of me? That's the question I had for them, why I'd climbed to the landscape's highest point. There was no answer, though. I guess that's the issue that had been nagging at me ever since I signed their contract: They'd said nothing about customer feedback. Paradise was supposed to be perfect - they took careful steps to form their design exactly to the customer's wishes, before the customer underwent the process, and gave the customer ample opportunity to review and request changes. After the fact, though - now, as far as they were concerned, I was four cubic feet of storage space and a slightly higher electric bill. --15 Mins-- Writing Exercise Index: http://www.patreon.com/creation?hid=393711
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