End Online - Chapter 30 & 31 Plan
So this was originally meant to only be for one chapter, but my imagination got the better of me and I ended up writing two chapters from it!!

Everything began as planned. Board this strange new boat, completely astonished by how slow it is, and we encounter our first sea monster. Okay, my plan mentioned the typical cliche tentacle monster, but I meant the Kraken type, I swear!


The second sea monster also followed the original plan, but after that is where things began to change.


First of all, after a storm hit, Fen's true form is revealed! The ending was just too perfect and we already had enough for a decent chapter! This happens easily when the battles get drawn out. I'm sure Goku was meant to defeat Frieza in only seven episodes, but that didn't happen either. 


On to the second chapter, we veered further away from the plan. I started off from the bottom of my plan, having Aunt Jude take the limelight. As I had originally planned, Mr Johnstone was to visit in an attempt to improve the relationship between Aunt Jude and himself. This is a result of his business stagnating from a mysterious hand and not knowing what to do other than use someone else to support himself and his position. 


Mr Johnstone ended up trying to bring up the topic of setting up an arranged marriage between his nephew and one of Jude's nieces, only to have Jude craftily avoid the topic and not give him the chance. This is what was re written in chapter 31, instead changing it to him bringing it up directly with Jude, allowing the story to continue moving forward. I also took this as an opportunity to bring up the past relationship between the two and how the know each other.


The latter part of this section of the plan was to have Jude bring up arranged marriages with her nieces and use the opportunity to visit Hollis(Lost) as motivation to have them learn about it and be more willing to accept it. This was completely scrapped, and replaced with the scene of Jude picking up the girls and showing a little of what their school is like.


Next up is time for Mikhail the Stalwart's point of view. This is mostly a recap to the current point of time. Only writing in first person do you truly get to take advantage of showing two different people's perspective on a similar situation.


I tried to bring it back on schedule for the latter part where we return to Lost's mind and continue our journey. Even showing the mermaids as planned. But we were far too off track to return to the original path so I decided to create a new one!


I took this opportunity to introduce the first Raid of the game. Somewhere where the main characters may return to one day or may not. I ban spoilers so I shall say no more words on the matter.


I had wanted to have Fen kill some mermaids from enticing Lost, but decided this to be too cruel. That doesn't mean that the mermaids are not nefarious creatures though!


The final stretch of the journey is arriving at the new land. And everything here after is in Chapter 32!! ^.^

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