Into the Wild Redux, Page Four
 
This page originally appeared on the site as pages seven and eight.  I ended up keeping much of the layout, but cleaning the art up some, which was definitely needed.  Now I'm able to have a level of consistancy between panels that I could only dream of when I started Legends of Fomora.  (Which is wild, because when I started I was miles a head of my old project, Unnatural 20.  Progress is fun to watch).

I've been able to capture more expressions with Baeve.  When I started, I could pretty much only make her look blank or mad.  That has changed quite a bit.  Part of it is getting better at drawing, the other part is getting better at observing.  You'd be surprised at how much you improve as a cartoonist by just looking at the world around you (or maybe you aren't that surprised, because that sounds a lot like common sense!).

As I mentioned in the last update, Baeve's father - his name is Fion, in case I've never mentioned that - was cleaned up significantly.  I wanted him to look more like Baeve, but I'm also realizing I want him to look clean so that he could feel like a strong, put together figure.  We've already seen Fion come back in a flashback to teach Baeve (and the readers) about the world she lives in.  I wanted him to appear both strong and sagely.  We don't know Baeve's mom, so we have to infer all of her up-bringing from her dad.  A picture [of a well cropped beard] is worth a thousand words.

While we're on the subject of Fion, the very last panel is the only major layout change.  In the original, we get a close up on Baeve as she hugs her father.  She's being as brave as she can given all the info she's asimilating.  But Fion's head is cut out.  I guess I wanted the focus to be on Baeve back then.  But this is really the only interaction between the two that we're going to get that isn't some sort of flashback.

I had said I wanted Fion to be strong and sagely.  This last panel, however, shows his tenderness, I think.  It's a trait that Baeve has.  It's always behind something else, she keeps her guard up.  But she is tender.  Her dad always was.  While this seems like a small change, I think it makes sure the reader knows, from the get go, that Fion and Baeve consider gentleness a strength.

Anyway, that was more in-depth that I was originally planning to go!  Hope you enjoyed reading as much as I did.  These pages have been a fun way to examine both my own growth, but also effective ways to use the medium of graphic story telling.  Talk to you soon!

-P.